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Universities should accept equal numbers of malle and femal in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #malle
Big schools should validate
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 total
number
 of boys and girls in each learning matter. I think it is a good point for research if universities could come up
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 idea of having equal numbers of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in every learning
categories
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.
However
, I strongly believe that there's has been no evidence yet if it could impact
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every student for learning.
Furthermore
, I've known that there are facilities for learning that facilitate exclusively for girls and boys only but there's no school counting for
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number
 of both genders.
However
, my view of point to disagree with
this
 topic is that
,
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i
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 don't really think that
equal
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number
 of gender in every subject matter has no relation when it comes to learning.
Moreover
, every individual has
unique
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 way of getting information from different subjects.
For example
, some of the
learner
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 could learn thru audio-visual, others are fond of reading, writing and other activities. To conclude, there are several activities that a big school could implement for learning rather than having
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number
 of gender.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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