Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Graduation college should be attended by
both
male
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and
female
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equally for all
subjects
. Higher educational institutes should allow equal opportunities to study each subject without
gender
difference
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differences
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. I believe, in
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level of acceptance in all
subjects
. Because these days
both
girls and boys can study any subject and show their capabilities by learning and interest
Firstly
, If there are unequal students in any subject considering
gender
, It may cause problems in future. As an example more
female
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females
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in computer science, Will choose
similar
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job
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jobs
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like software developers. By following
such
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only female employees get to work in these industries.
On the other
hand
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boys will only get more
chance
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in mechanical
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resulting from non-computer
subjects
.
This
can cause diversification problems and only one
gender
will be working in one specific domain, while
other
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in
different
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domain.
However
, equal opportunities in all
subjects
,
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could help in raising in employment as
both
male
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and
female
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females
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work together, to achieve higher goals. While considering equal options
employer
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employers
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also
look for
both
gender
candidates and that will result in more girls in many fields like national security, mechanical and scientific jobs.
For
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in many countries still
female
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females
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are less exposed to jobs, mostly they are looking for household works or childcare. To conclude,
equal
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ratio of male and female in all
subjects
definitely improve employment for women and
also
empower them. All
college
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colleges
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and universities should consider
this
and will
be result
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in
brighter
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future
of
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female
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females
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specially
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  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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