Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Graduation college should be attended by
both
males and females equally for all
course
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courses

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. Higher educational institutes should allow equal opportunities to study each subject without
gender
differences. I believe, in the same level of acceptance in all
subjects
. Because these days
both
girls and boys can study any subject and show their capabilities by learning and interest
Firstly
, If there are unequal students in any subject considering
gender
, It may cause problems in future. As an example more
female
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females

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in computer science, Will choose
a similar jobs
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a similar job
similar jobs

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like software developers. By following
such
trend
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a trend

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only female employees get to work in these industries. On the other ,hand boys will only get more chances in
mechanical
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the mechanical

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field resulting from non-computer
subjects
.
This
can cause diversification problems and only one
gender
will be working in one specific domain, while the other in a different domain.
However
, equal opportunities in all
subjects
,
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apply

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could help in raising in employment as
both
male
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males

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and
female
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females

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work together, to achieve higher goals. While considering equal options employers
also
look for
both
gender
candidates and that will result in more girls in many fields like national security, mechanical and scientific jobs. For ,instance in many countries still
female
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females

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are less exposed to jobs, mostly they are looking for household works or childcare. To conclude, an equal ratio of male and female in all
subjects
definitely improve employment for women and
also
empower them. All colleges and universities should consider
this
and will result in a brighter future
of
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females especially. Admitting the same amount of students in each course is better.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • also
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