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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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I am Tahir
Saife
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 from Noida and I am writing
this
 letter to you in regard
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 my admission to
XYZ
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computer
course
 which is quite attractive to me. I have learned from www.abc.com that you are
strarting
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starting
 a new batch of XYZ
computer
course
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 from
1st
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 week of Sept 2021 and I am quite eager to register myself for the same. The eligibility criteria mentioned to enrol in
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 is to have completed a formal basic
course
 in computers which is a challenge for me. Though I have not done any formal
computer
course
 due to some personal reasons and
situation
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 at home,
however
, I have
excellent
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 understanding of
computer
 fundamentals, databases used, operating system and know, how to use it for office work including working knowledge of MS Office and Tally. I was able to learn all
this
 by doing the
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. I request you to look for a possibility if my
regsitration
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registration
 can be under special circumstances, with my
self declaration
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 to have
understanding
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 of
computer
 basics and given an exceptional approval for not submitting the certificate issued by a university or college. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Tahir
Saife
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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