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The news media have too much influence on peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#news #media #influence #peoples #lives #development
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Media
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 is
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 part of whole the
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's life and survival assistance.
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 are adversely affected by the news as some
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 think while others opine there are a lot of benefits as well. Here, I will illustrate here in
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 essay both views. On the one hand, some
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 believe that
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 has a negative influence on
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 as
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 sometimes try to impact the personal life of few
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 badly
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 individuals generally get stressed because of interference.
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, children get the bad effects of
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 while watching tv and other social sources because sometimes
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 telecast few non-watchable things for kids but as a family entertainment sometimes kids get involved. Adding to
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,
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 sometimes give a wrong message to the public regarding religion so
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 is the main reason for riots or fights .
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, the public is in favour of
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 as a concern of a lot of benefits
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media
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 is a good source of entertainment and information as in
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 era
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 are so busy in other activities
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media
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 fulfil all their requiring source of knowledge.
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,
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 is a good provider of the whole
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,s news and headlines of any issue.
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, sometimes nations try to touch the whole
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 to get in touch or convey a message regarding any disaster or
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 unity so
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 is the only source of
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. Overall,
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 is the best provider of the
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 to get in touch of any news so ,basically, its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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