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It is usually foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting established in a good job. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the majority of people argue that a
person
 should have a stable salary and a minimum real estate like a house and a car. While some people tend towards the viewpoint that being married is motivation to achieve results faster , I would have to support the idea that getting married before graduating from a university and getting a job is foolish. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that marriage at the age of early
20’s
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 is a huge responsibility and many people do not manage with
this
. One of the main reasons is that having a family totaly decreases a
person
's possible capabilities and abilities.
This
 means that he can't take a risk to try a variety of jobs and ways in his life.
On the other hand
, without a job, a
person
 will not have a financial condition to support his family. For
this
reason
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 many young couples take unbearable credits and mortgages.
This
 leads to the fact that they are too busy with their work and do not have not enough time for children and leave them to their grandparents.
In contrast
, family is great motivation to become successful and work harder.
For instance
, some of the richest men said that exactly their wife's whims made them become who they are now Taking these points into consideration, I disagree with the opinion that getting married at the age of
20's
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 and take great responsibility at
such
 an early age is wrong and close many ways to a
person
's happiness future.
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