Excessive sugar consumption causes many diseases. Some people think that it is the government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption while others think that it is the individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views
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In the 21st century consumption of
sugar
intakes are increase extensively due to unhealthy Add a comma
,sugar
lifestyle
. However
, on
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one
group
of Add an article
a group
the group
people
ponder that it is the responsibility
of people
themselves to regulate disease
like diabetics , while other groups Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
opines
that Change the verb form
opine
government
should initiate new
intervention for Add an article
a new
this
problem. In this
essay, I will explain both views with relevant examples.
To begin
,there are many measures that can apply society
with the help of Change preposition
to society
government
to reduce Add an article
the government
lifestyle
diseases like diabetics. Firstly
, food authorities need to list out harmful preservatives and food colours among customers for understanding which one is good for their body.Inaddition
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In addition
this
is more accurate for people
to analyse good products from their market. Secondly
, government
should initiate a regular community checkup for Add an article
the government
people
through primary
health Add an article
the primary
center
.Fix the agreement mistake
centers
This
will initiate an
awareness among Remove the article
apply
public
related to high blood Correct article usage
the public
sugar
.On the other hand
, educating parents or youngsters makes
a huge difference in their outlook of Change the verb form
make
healthy
Add an article
a healthy
lifestyle
. To illustrate this
, in Japan every council provides free monthly Add a hyphen
check-up
check
up for local Fix the agreement mistake
checks
people
and if they have any lifestyle
disease government
will provide them nutrition
experts for their Change preposition
with nutrition
betterments
.
Apparently, it's our Fix the agreement mistake
betterment
responsibility
to take care of our own health because mental preparation is the most important thing for getting healthy
body. Admittedly, reducing food consumption helps for weight loss and it Add an article
a healthy
regulate
Change the verb form
regulates
sugar
level in our blood cells
Reportedly, there are plenty of mobile apps provides
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that provides
a
healthy diet tips, exercise ,yoga practice and meditation.Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Moreover
, a responsible person who initiated this ideas
, definitely he will recover from diabetics. Change the determiner
this idea
these ideas
For example
, one of my friend
recently tested with high blood Change to a plural noun
friends
sugar
but now he is completely ok because he followed keto
diet with the help of a mobile app .So that means individual Add an article
the keto
a keto
responsibility
has a vital role in reducing sugar
consumption.
In conclusion
there is a saying 'health is our wealth' Add a comma
,conclusion
similarly
'a sound body can make a sound mind'. So everyone need
a collective Change the verb form
needs
responsibility
to regulate sugar
intakes
and healthy habits . It is high time that Fix the agreement mistake
intake
government
and Correct article usage
the government
people
ensured a healthy routine in our society for further
development.Submitted by sooryag03 on
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