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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#people #sports #event #country
It has been suggested that topic for discussion, many
people
 believe that international sports are to be hosted by the
government
 and
this
 event is excellent, cheerful,
on the
contrary
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 the others argue that
this
 action isn't better. We will discuss
both
 sides of the argument.
First
 of all,
to begin
 with, some
people
 consider that hosting international sports is good for the
country
. As a matter of
fact
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 there are some positive points on
this
 matter, as a pattern
people
 can watch prominent
both
 sportsmen and sportswomen, what is
more
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 the
country
 can be known by other folk or countries.
For
instance
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 more overseas nation(s) can be got information with various ways like websites, newspapers, tv programs and so on.
Moreover
, another factor is many tourists will come to the homeland and the budget of the
country
 will get more income.
Hence
, there are more advantage points on
this
 matter. Let us take a look at the other. In fact, much money is demanded by these events for different things like to construct stadiums, gyms, on top that other extra buildings. I have read that from
the
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blogs and social media, the starving problem, unemployment, without house
people
 and others have been increasing step by step. If the
government
 spends the budget
to
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such
 issues
both
country
 and nation will become better. What is more, organizations should be created by the
government
 for solving these issues.
This
 act will assist to get strong and the living level will get progress. As an example, if some without
house
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 the young or adults, alone inhabits pregnant women, and others must be supported by organizations. Briefly, I believe that hosting isn't the best idea, the
government
 ought to attract tourists or countries with other useful styles or ways. Weighing up
both
 sides of the argument, I must admit that
although
 the hosting has got some positive sides, generally,
this
 opinion isn't better for mainly folk and
such
 outlay is in vain.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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