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Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language.

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Some
people
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 think that all
children
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 in the world should have
ability
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 to speak the universal
language
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 very well.
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, there are
also
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indivisuals
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individuals
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, who disagree with the statement. In my opinion,
children
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, who cannot use their mother tongue fluently don’t need to know
foreign
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language
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 for several reasons that will be discussed below.
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 of all, it is clear that studying a foreign dialect from a kid has many disadvantages.
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 is because
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apply
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 Education of a foreign
language
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 for the younger students who are under 10 years old can produce stress and cause mental
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 to the young
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.
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, from
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 grade in primary school,
children
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 study English as a foreign
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 because
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second
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a second
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 dialect as a kid is too burdensome.
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, teaching Korean letters to
children
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 in kindergartens is strictly forbidden by law in Korea.
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 shows that
early-childhood
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early childhood
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 foreign
language
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 teaching is inefficient.
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, I agree the skill
to
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speak the universal
language
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 is well beneficial.
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, should all the
children
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 in the world have to speak that freely? These days, more and more
people
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 are using translation
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apps
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by
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on
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 their cell
phone
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phones
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 to communicate
foreigners
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with foreigners
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 can live more conveniently with modern technology like Google transportation
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apps
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 without struggling to study
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language
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languages
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. In conclusion, I would like to say that
children
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 should not have the skill to speak very well in the universal dialect because technology would help them to talk with
people
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 from all over the world who are using different languages.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • fluently
  • native language
  • effective communication
  • global understanding
  • unity
  • educational opportunities
  • career opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • social integration
  • language barriers
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