Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

It has been suggested that topic for discussion, technologies are developing so computers are indispensable for everyone in the contemporary time. Some people claim that classrooms are to be provided with it and their program, the others argue that there are certain level risks in
this
process. We will discuss both
sides
of the argument.
To begin
with, schools or classrooms should be ensured with computers and programs. In fact, nowadays
technology
and knowledge are getting progress,
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some people believe that
this
century is '
technology
' time. To be honest, if classrooms are provided with computers, probably
children
can get more data than before time. As a
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pattern if a person doesn't know anything, he will learn much and large information. On top of that,
children
will accustom to utilize from
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this
situation will create extra obligations and responsibility
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. Briefly, we can see that there are some positive points on
this
matter. Let us take a look at the other so that many people consider that there are some risks in
this
process. I am to admit that some illnesses can be established by computer in front of sitting down
such
as weaker of eyes, back pains like kyphosis, scoliosis and so on. No doubt that the healthy always is indispensable and decisive than other things. In fact, some doctors and scholars recommend that technological beam must be avoided by everyone,
children
ought to accustom to
this
process.
Hence
, the negative
sides
outnumber the positive
sides
. Weighing up both
sides
of the argument,
children
are necessary to be accustomed to books and they have to use
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technology
for beneficial things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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