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The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table depicts the underground railway
system
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 in six different cities
such
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 as London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles with related data
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 as date opened, kilometres of route and passengers per
year
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 travelled. London is the oldest city amongst the cities in the table, which has the
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 underground railway
system
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 built in 1863 and has a vast network with 394kms in distance.
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, Paris and Tokyo have the railway
system
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 constructed in the years 1900 and 1927 respectively, with Paris having the
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-highest passengers each
year
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 and Tokyo having the highest
number
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 of travellers which is 1927 million in
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. It is evident that Washington DC has a comparable network distance to Tokyo’,
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, the
number
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 of voyagers per
year
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 is considerably lower than Tokyo’. Kyoto and Los Angeles have the most newly built railways
system
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, developed in the years 1981 and 2001 respectively.
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, Kyoto is having the smallest route at only 11kms long and with the least
number
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 of travellers per
year
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.
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