Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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a lot
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that scientific and academic
information
should be shared. Whereas, others think that
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information
are very great value and should n't be shared.
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examine
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two points of view. Sharing
information
will help to transfer
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knowledge to other communities to improve quality of life.
This
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an equal
societies
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and
just
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world. Free share of
information
help to
imrove
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improve
societies.
Forexample
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For example
, in the current critical climate of the covid-19 sharing
information
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vaccine
production
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could save millions of
life
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worldwide.
On the other hand
, the companies spend millions of
dollers
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dollars
and huge resources to develop new drugs free share of
this
information
may not be feasible and could deter other companies invest in future job
develpment
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development
. Another example, free share of the knowledge on trains manufacturing will not be
readilly
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readily
available
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because
the company have
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significant
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amount of financial and personal resource.
Simillarly
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Similarly
, sharing
information
on the new technologies like
tele communication
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telecommunication
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would benefit poor countries to provide
better
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a better
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educational
system
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systems
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to school children. In conclusion,
although
free sharing is
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noble behaviours, in
reality
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may not be practical.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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