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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are a lot of people who believe that scientific and academic
information
 should be shared. Whereas, others think that that
information
are
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 of very great value and should n't be shared.
This
 essay will examine these two points of view. Sharing
information
 will help to transfer know-how knowledge to other communities to improve quality of life.
This
 will in turn how to create an equal society and a just world. Free share of
information
 help to improve societies.
For example
, in the current critical climate of the covid-19 sharing
information
 on the vaccine ,production could save millions of lives worldwide.
On the other hand
, the companies spend millions of dollars and huge resources to develop new drugs free share of
this
information
 may not be feasible and could deter other companies invest in future job development. Another example, free share of the knowledge on trains manufacturing will not be readily available because the company have spent a significant amount of financial and personal resource.
Similarly
, sharing
information
 on new technologies like telecommunication would benefit poor countries to provide a better educational system to school children. In conclusion,
although
 free sharing is a very noble behaviour, in ,reality may not be practical.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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