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THE BEST WAY TO LEARN ABOUT CULTURES IS TO WORK IN MULTINATIONAL ORGANISATIONS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#cultures #work #organisations
in recent, time doing job in multinational companies is becoming popular as compare to the past. It is believed by
people
 that doing a job in international is the best a way to learn about new traditions while
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 I disagree with
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 statement
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 essay will elaborate why others ways are more worthwhile in following paragraphs. To commence with there is no doubt most of the workers from different parts of the world. But most of the time they are busy achieving their goals owing to
this
 they do not have much time for communication in the workplace related to their personal life. to will us prats the English are used by multinational workers
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 because it is difficult to understand every native language of a single worker.
furthermore
, travelling is another way to acquire information. so
people
 get a chance to meet new
people
 due to
this
 they get chance to get great depth
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without
 visiting the native place. to ,epitomize it was published in theneavspaper article about 70 of learners preferred to visiting
then
 closing wark in multination for getting data about customs.
besides
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 in the technical
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 everything is on the internet.
people
 can enhance their knowledge by watching different videos and read about them. it can be helped to them learn basic to advance. warn English is a youtube channel that provides information about speaking skills. to conclude despite doing job in
mnc
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many
mind
people
 do not enhance knowledge in great depth internet and travelling can help a lot these are more interesting as were as information.
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