As a results of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights.what problems does this haveon the environment?what measures could be taken to slove the problem?

Due to the constant increase in the number of people who goes on a
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holiday
every. Air travels is becoming in demand and
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common type of transportation used by
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travellers. Because of
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continuing activity of
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the human environment is now suffering. With
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we need to come up with some solution in order to prevent
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kind of problem.
First
, we need to minimize travelling by planes.
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travelling
using
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why not try going somewhere within your country or place. So that it will help
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the air pollution causing by the
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.
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you save a lot of money from
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air tickets
.
Second
, we need to be responsible
also
in throwing our garbage while we were travelling. As much as possible avoid using disposable plastic materials that can cause
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effects to the environment.
Lastly
, with the
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growth of technologies
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aircrafts
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now
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eco friendly.
This
planes
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uses
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special types of fuel that will contribute to
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carbon emissions. In conclusion, as frequent
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you should be responsible
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all of your actions. Choose alternative ways of travelling. Be
a good citizens
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a good citizen
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of
this
world by helping and preserving our environment.
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