People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In these present times, healthcare costs are rising due to the growth in modern diseases and viruses which are effect
from
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harmful routines. These lifestyles include
disadvantage
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nutrition, smoking and lack of exercise.
However
, I partially agree with
this
statement.
Thus
, in
this
essay, both sides of
this
issue will be discussed.
People
who have unhealthy daily life like to ignore
about
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their fitness.
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, drink alcohol, smoking, consume fatty food and so on.
Moreover
, the major of deceases are occur from personal
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. As the result,
human
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have
an
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unusual
symptom
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and go to
hospital
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to cure.
Then
, persons who get sick should have to spend more than well – being
person
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because treatment expenditure include medicines, services from
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center
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, lab test, and etc.
For instance
, the office man who
love
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to do their work overtime,
not
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allocate time to work out, and
devour
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junk foods is affected
from
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cancer.
Hence
,
this
man must use his saving money to pay for treatment. While
,
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healthy
people
are not matter
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to disburse for curing.
In contrast
, all
people
should have
a
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welfare from the government to approach public health because it must be
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basis
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privilege of all. So, it will
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in
this
issue whatever you have a weak condition or strong body, you must deserve public health services thoroughly. It can illustrate which sickness
people
should be cured
from
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government healthcare
in
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suitable
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price and do not cash in the extra bills. In conclusion, from my perspective, I agree with
statement
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because everyone should care yourselves in order to spend additional for remedy and help to reduce emergency
patient
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patients
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burden
  • lifestyle-related diseases
  • healthcare systems
  • personal responsibility
  • preventable diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • ethical considerations
  • penalizing
  • discrimination
  • socio-economic groups
  • deterrent
  • health education
  • financial penalties
  • health inequalities
  • access to healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health goals
  • promoting healthy lifestyles
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