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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a “fat tax” is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

#effect #individuals #society #people #government #tax #foods #“fat #tax”
Because of the negative effect of unhealthy lifestyle to the society. It
is perceive
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 that
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 should
tax
 unhealthy
food
such
 as sugary drinks but others
thinks
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 it is unnecessary. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate
my
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 opinion regarding
to
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this
 matter. In several
countries
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tax
 is always an argument especially when it comes to
food
 and drinks. When there is
tax
,
price
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the price
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 of goods
tend
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 to spike and becoming unreasonable to buy.
As a result
,
people
 will not buy
those
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food
.
This
help
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 them to become more healthy and fit. 
On the other hand
, some
people
 consider it unfair to charge those taxes. Mainly because for some in terms of
food
 government should respect peoples judgement. In my opinion,
tax
 is not the solution for
people
 to become healthy. There are many ways
people
 can do. Like eating nutritious
food
 and exercises regularly. And
also
 I find unfair for some
people
 paying
tax
 related to foods. To conclude,
government
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the government
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 should not implement
fat
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a fat
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tax
 and it
unreasonable
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is unreasonable
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 to
tax
food
.
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