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Hope the email finds you well, and I appreciate you would have a chance to give me some advice on my revised research proposal,
also
, I’d like to invite you and Jonny to have a coffee or meal to meet up offline, ( my flight was cancelled,
thus
 I’m continuing to be stuck in London). Jonny is available from 9th to 20th August, hope we could find some days to fit in with your schedule, or I don’t mind separate ones if it is hard to find the proper time for both. I’m quite excited that the coming research under your supervision will start soon. The good news is that I have received an offer on 4th August,
however
, it is a full-time study from January 2021 ( which is earlier
this
 year) , it is different from what I applied for, which was a part-time study from
this
 September as you knew. I suppose it probably is a system error, and have sent an email to ask admissions and copied it to you.
Furthermore
,
this
 is a conditional offer. But I’m a resident in the UK , who is not a full-time international student who needs to apply for a study visa. My understanding is that I don’t
to
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 provide all the requirements related to visa application,
such
 as evidence of English language competence i.e IELTS and etc., which I don’t have at the moment. I have asked questions to admissions as well, hope it wouldn’t impact the time of my entry. I really appreciate it if you could help me to check with admissions too, to give a push to clarify no no my situation and re-offer me a non-conditional part-time one starting from
this
 September. Many thanks. Please let me know your availability for the following weeks, and wish you have a good weekend.
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