The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

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they don't refuse from
this
process. We will discuss reasons and solving rules.
To begin
with the reasons. As a matter of fact, the various causes can be discovered by each person who has
this
habit.
Firstly
, as far as I know,
people
admire smoking when there are various negative consequences in their jobs or duties,
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they get unsuccessful results any jobs and so on. As a pattern, in fact, the loving life can't be understood by
people
sometimes, many
people
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to the cigarettes.
Furthermore
, young
people
are pressured by
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family members, if they can't get
luck
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in
this
process, much time they direct different hazardous habits and unfortunately, one of them is
the
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smoking. Let us take a look at the solving ways. I am of the opinion that, there are some processes for dropping off. Many
people
consider that
,
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the protective measures should be realized by the governments like the amount of tax has to be increased by the country, different bans must be enforced for the selling and the age limit ought to be enforced and so on. Recently, the young utilize more than before time, I believe strongly, while the measures use(d),
firstly
, to the young should be paid attention. Because
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they are
future
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for every country. Taking everything into consideration, the smoking level will be decreased by the protective enactments,
nevertheless
preventing is impossible absolutely. Everybody is to avoid
from
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this
habit and to heed their healthy.
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