some people think that the internet makes a person more sociable while other think it makes a person less sociable. discuss both views and give your opinion?

The
internet
is undoubtedly one of the greatest inventions of all. While some
people
believe that the
internet
has made them more
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in order to socialise, others believe it makes
people
more
introvert
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.
This
essay will discuss both the views following
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the relevant example and my opinion on
this
topic.
First
of all,
to begin
with, because of
the
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technological advancement,
the
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communication has become quite easy as compared to the previous time. Various social media applications and websites made it convenient for anyone and everyone to contact their loved ones living miles apart. Apart from
this
, because of
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digitalization
digitalisation
, many individuals get an opportunity to represent themselves in front of a huge group of
people
and eventually it helps
overcoming
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their insecurities.
For example
, many of us are not comfortable in front of the camera but we have the knowledge that we can spread to the world.
This
has become possible with the help of YouTube and it helped many
people
to come out of their
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.
Consequently
, excess use of the
internet
results in
decreased
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a decreased
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amount of social activities and eventually depression. Nowadays, there are many websites available in the market where an individual can chat with the person of their choice and make new friends according to
the
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preference.
However
, it affects their skills to socialize with
people
in person that could result in distancing themselves from reality and could lead to anxiety and depression. A recent survey shows that the number of youngsters suffering from mental health issues increased by 40% in the
last
decade. In conclusion, considering the
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reasons,
although
internet
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is a very helpful invention, if not used in moderation, keeping its disadvantages in mind, it could affect the basic
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a very considerable extent.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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