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Nowadays a large amount of advertising aimed at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays a lot of
advertisements
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 are targeted at
children
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. It is believed by some that
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 has a negative effect on
children
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 and should be banned. While I agree that
advertisements
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 should be banned, I
also
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 believe that some
advertisements
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 have a positive effect on
children
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. There are many reasons why
advertisements
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 should be banned. The
first
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reason
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 is that
children
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 are attracting to those
advertisements
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 and purchasing the
products
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 without thinking about them. The
second
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reason
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 is that some
products
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 are out of families budget compared to their parents' incomes despite purchase those
products
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. To quote an example, in India, the advertisement of Maggie has been banned because
children
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 are attracted to it and purchased it on regular basis.
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, if parents do not buy
products
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,
children
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 feel depressed or stress. Another
reason
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 is that
children
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 watch their favourite celebrities
advertisements
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 than they copy them like smoking or drinking, clothing sense.
However
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, I
also
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 believe that some
advertisements
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 have a positive effect on
children
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. The main
reason
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 is that
children
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 know about the new
products
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, the price of the
products
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, the company of the
products
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. The
second
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reason
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 is that some
advertisements
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 can motivate
children
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 by giving good content. They focus on their study and complete their goals after watching those
advertisements
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. In conclusion,
although
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advertisements
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 should be banned, some
advertisements
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 give positive content and it is helpful for
children
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.

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