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More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to past. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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In
this
 high technology world,
people
 like to live alone more than to live in
the
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society
.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons
of
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why
people
who
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tend to live alone in
this
 contemporary world. The reason why
people
 prefer to live by themselves lie in individuals and societal values. One of the reasons is increasing modernization.
People
 in the past lived with a big family and cared about the family and community,
however
,
people
 in the present prioritize their own life over others.
Therefore
, individualism is increasing in modern
society
.
People
 like to be alone without any
distraction
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distractions
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 and
disturbance
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disturbances
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 from others. They opt to live alone.
In addition
 to
this
,
society
 starts to respect
to
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this
kind
 of family in
different
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a different
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way
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ways
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.
For example
,
people
 have come to any gathering or family party with
different
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type
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types
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 of families like single-person
household
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households
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.
This
 develops trend can have
advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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 results. With regards to advantage, that
kind
 of
people
concentrate
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 on their studies.
For instance
, they can improve on computer skills. Because
this
kind
 of major
need
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 more focusing as well as no disturbing. They can put all their energy
on
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 learning
this
 type of course.
On the other hand
, living by own can alienate
themselves
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them
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 from others including family members. The result of
this
kind
 of life is loneliness. In conclusion, living alone can become
a
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 main path in some societies. Because now we live in
individualistic
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society
 and we are going to
this
 rapid pace.
This
 type of
lifes
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lives
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make
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distance
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the distance
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 between family members and
society
.
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