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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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It is frequently said that studying abroad could be beneficial for a
student
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also
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consequences
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 I am going to give some examples of benefits but I will discuss
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the disadvantages.
Firstly
 I think that a
student
 has to study wherever he wants, without difference between countries according to his
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attitude
.
Moreover
, studying abroad can give
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the young
student
 more skills
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 of attending the university close to home, for
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 if a person study in
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an other
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 country He will learn the native language and
then
 he will improve some essential skills as living alone without their parent.
Although
 there are several advantages
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 studying abroad, There are some drawbacks and negative
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consequences
. One of them can be when the young guy has a problem,
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 an
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healthy
health
 problem and if you are far from your parents can be more stressful to find a solution without nobody can help you.
However
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 I think that
nowaday
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 there are a number of
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 of
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communication
 with our relatives that we never feel home-sick and In my experience can be extremely
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useful
 for examples video-chatting with my parents by Skype. In conclusion, I believe that a
student
 has to study abroad because it can be a great experience of life where He can learn and discover deeply new cultures but there will be are
also
 some drawbacks and
this
 could be a problem especially if the
student
 is so young but
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 thanks to technology we can find a solution.
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