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The best way to solve world’s environment problem is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion.

#world’s #environment #cost #fuel
Uses of
fuels
 may
helps
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 us to ease our
life
 but it can greatly affect our
environment
. According to some
people
's
view point
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viewpoint
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, the cost of
the
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fuel
need
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 to be increased to solve
this
 kind of problem. Because
peoples
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people
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 are using
fosil
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fossil
fuel
 a lot, it is dangerous for the
environment
.
This
 essay will delve into the viewpoint and I will provide my individual opinion on that matter. To commence with, It is visible that many peoples are using
fuels
in
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accomodate
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accommodate
 their
life
. like as, we are using vehicles that
specially
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 uses
the
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apply
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petroleum and diesel. Day to day
life
people
 need
fuels
 a lot for cooking, for using several
machine
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machines
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 in agriculture and even it is helpful to create electric energy. But in the process of using
this
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these
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fuels
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 there are some drawbacks.
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An increase
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Increase
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 amount of use of
fuels
 will degrade the
environment
 because
fuels
 are the reason to emit carbon
dieoxide
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dioxide
. In the
air
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,air
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 there
are
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is
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 a little amount of it and it is around 0.03
percent
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per cent
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. If the amount
increase
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increases
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then
 it will harm the living creature. So, if the price of
fuel
increase
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increases
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,
then
people
 will reduce
the
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 use in daily
life
 and move for the alternative. Though I agree that it is a great solution,
but
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 we have to take some other precautions. Only increasing the cost will not be enough. The government have to take the control of
number
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a number
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 of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 run with
fuel
 and make the policy to use
electric
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an electric
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 car that
are
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is
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environment
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environmentally
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 friendly.
In addition
, we have to
envolve
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involve
evolve
people
 to arrange some awareness
program
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programs
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 that will help
people
 to be more cautious. We
also
 need to
cost effective
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 alternative ways. To conclude with,
Environment
 is
heart
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the heart
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 of the livings. So, we should take every necessary means to keep it healthy. For
that
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,that
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 we have to follow some
norm
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norms
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 and rules and we should suggest
people
to
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maintain
this
. In my belief, It is not that difficult If we work together.
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  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • sustainable
  • public transit
  • eco-friendly
  • economic disparity
  • greenhouse gases
  • inflationary pressure
  • environmental degradation
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