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Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In the 21st century, the technology like
internet
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 extensively
using
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 by
people
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. In which one group of
people
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 ponder that the facility of
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internet
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 should be free in manner, while another group opines that everyone should
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charge
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 an extra fee for the
service
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. In
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 essay, I will explain both views and will summarise my opinion regarding
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,
free
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 facility is more applicable for developing and underdeveloped countries because the
people
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 over there cannot afford
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service
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 which
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 a sense of disparities among them.
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, it is more accurate for modern education that every
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 learning
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online which make a
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 initiative for free access.
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, due to
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corona virus
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 schools and public libraries are shut down, whereas the children learn their lessons through Google meet.
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, many developing countries
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government
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 provided free mobile
internet
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 facilities for their children to continue their studies.
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, we can construct online shopping, marketing, business strategies for meeting living expenses so
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government
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 introducing free network facilities not only enhance education but
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 helps to meet the dreams of many
people
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 in our society. Apparently, giving a free
service
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 is not an easy task it needs more infrastructure and money.
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, poor countries need to meet mobile
service
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, mobile application, officials and policies for imparting these
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service
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.
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, it arises a question for paying services and it
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 a helping hand for the authorities to reduce their debt. Admittedly, the
people
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 now spending more time
in
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internet
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the internet
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 for leisure activities or other unnecessary things which brings
government
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 regulation of
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 through paying extra money. To illustrate
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Government
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 of India now charging extra
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 for video game companies because youngsters
now
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 addicted
these
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 games and spending more time
in
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on
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internet
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 in order to regulate
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applied
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 by controlling authorities. In conclusion, we want technology to meet the needs of modern life but charging for
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service
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 should be on the basis of
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 background of
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.
otherwise
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, it makes a huge difference between the life of rich and poor
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. it is high time that
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government insured
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internet
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service
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 for all its
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citizens
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, as they are the future of the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • right to access
  • essential resources
  • digital economy
  • social equity
  • government responsibility
  • privately funded infrastructure
  • market dynamics
  • personal responsibility
  • fundamental right
  • user fees
  • innovation
  • economic growth
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