Mobile phones and the Internet have made it easy to stay in contact with other people. However, as a lot of time is spent using telephones and computers, there is less face-to-face contact and direct communication. Is the growing use of communications technology a positive or a negative development for society ?

In
21st
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century there
are
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a lot of new
technology
to stay in contact with other
people
, so there is less face-to-face contact and direct
communication
.
However
real life
comunication
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communication
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not exist.     Modern
technology
is an essential part of
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out
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our
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life.
First
of all,
communication
technology
has bought us a huge
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of benefits.
People
can keep in touch with each other in spite of
distance
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.
Also
, the Internet helps others make friends. There are endless dating sites,
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wich
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helps
people
find a soul mate or a
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best
bear
friend.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, with
Internet
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the Internet
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humanity has access to everything it wants to know. Thanks to the invention of
Internet
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people
can absorb any information like
diffirent
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different
perspectives or new interesting ideas.   
Nevertheless
,
socialmedia
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social media
users are subject to loss of personal information
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which
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wich
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which
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leads to bad consequences.
Moreover
long-term of the phone without
innteruption
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interruption
,
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develops
visial
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visual
impairment. The use of communications
technology
is a negative
develpment
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development
for society
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that it tends to breed laziness
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wich
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will probably bring major
propbems
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problems
.    To sum up, I can say that there a lot of
advatages
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advantages
and
disadvatages
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disadvantages
in
this
issue. Anyway, before using
communication
technology
person must learn to keep track of the time while he uses
phone
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and
do
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not forget about
rael
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real
communication
.
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