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It is important for children to learn difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers are allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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A
child
 will be successful only when he is in the
right
 direction with values and morals. It is
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 of the elders in society to guide younger
children
. It is imperative to teach the
child
 about what is
right
 and wrong at an early
age
. Punishment does not always serve
right
, sometimes it may lead
children
 in the wrong direction, a little punishment can be given if the
child
 is hesitant to adapt to
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righteous behaviour.
Parents
 and teachers should mould the
children
into
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 the
right
 path. They should be able to distinguish
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right
 and wrong at an early
age
 because it helps to build their character with strong foundations. If they do not learn these things, it may lead the
child
 to hurt his peer students or even commit crimes.
For instance
, there are
children
 without
parents
 and shelter, they grow up on their own and these are the more likely one’s to commit some serious crimes because no one has ever taught them what is
right
 and what is wrong. It will be easier for
parents
 and guides to educate their
children
 about morals and values at
earlier
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 stage because it is the phase where
children
 start understanding the world.
Children
 always try to imitate their elders, so it is always essential for a parent to act
right
 in front of them.
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children
 at
young
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age
 are easy to manipulate.
For example
, the kinder garden student will believe his
parents
 and try to learn things from them, where a secondary school student never listens to
parents
 or teachers. Punishments are not always
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 for guiding a student
into
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right
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 direction.
This
 can have a negative effect on their attitude and behaviour.
Although
, simple punishments like grounding can be given to notorious
children
. All in all, It is essential to teach
children
 about
right
 and wrong at an early to have
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society at
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age
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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