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It is important for children to learn difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers are allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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child
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 will be successful only when he is in the
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 direction with values and morals. It is
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 of the elders in society to guide younger
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. It is imperative to teach the
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 about what is
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 and wrong at an early
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. Punishment does not always serve
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, sometimes it may lead
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 in the wrong direction, a little punishment can be given if the
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 is hesitant to adapt to
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righteous behaviour.
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 and teachers should mould the
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 the
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 path. They should be able to distinguish
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 and wrong at an early
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 because it helps to build their character with strong foundations. If they do not learn these things, it may lead the
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 to hurt his peer students or even commit crimes.
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, there are
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 without
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 and shelter, they grow up on their own and these are the more likely one’s to commit some serious crimes because no one has ever taught them what is
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 and what is wrong. It will be easier for
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 and guides to educate their
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 about morals and values at
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 stage because it is the phase where
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 start understanding the world.
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 always try to imitate their elders, so it is always essential for a parent to act
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 in front of them.
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children
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 at
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age
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 are easy to manipulate.
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, the kinder garden student will believe his
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 and try to learn things from them, where a secondary school student never listens to
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 or teachers. Punishments are not always
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a solution
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 for guiding a student
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right
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 direction.
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 can have a negative effect on their attitude and behaviour.
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, simple punishments like grounding can be given to notorious
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. All in all, It is essential to teach
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 about
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 and wrong at an early to have
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 position in
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society at
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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