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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by some that the
news
 is not related to people's livelihood and
that is
 why it does not deserve the attention to read or watch them. In my opinion, it is really questionable if one should acquire
such
 a type of knowledge or not.
This
 essay will discuss both sides. On the one hand,processing the
news
 can lead to overloading our brains with useless
information
.
For example
, an average citizen has no need to heat the
information
 about wars, conflicts, weather
catastrophic
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catastrophes
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, etc. happening in other countries, if it is only not linked with his or her own region.
Moreover
,to my view, it only distracts the mind and puts a watcher into an anxious mood. My parents watch television
news
 every evening and learn nothing from them but some rubbish facts which are undoubtedly important for other continents but not for Russia, the place where they live.
On the other hand
, the
information
 linked with the area where a person
lives
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life
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 becomes crucial in some sort of situation.
For instance
, knowledge about local floods, car accidents, fires and other emergency situations can orient
person
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a person
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 and prevent him or her from taking part in
such
 unfortunate events. In conclusion, I would say that the question of whether perceiving the
news
 by one is useless or not depends on the type of
information
. It influences mind overload or sponsors society with extremely helpful knowledge which can help it to escape unhappy occasions. I think the government of each particular country should inform the population with the
second
 type.
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