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Advertisements are the most important marketing strategy to enhance the sale of products? do you agree or disagree?

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One of the most important marketing techniques is to commercialize the products to increase their sales. The following statements are my views of point which I agree and disagree with
this
 topic.
First
 of all, advertising ads are a very big factor to make known to the public that there are new products available in the market. Through
this
, people will be able to know the features of the said products and their importance. It will really help to convince the consumer to purchase the
items
 because they have their ideas about
the
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.
For example
, Nike, the sporting
company
 which is very well known in the clothing and foot ware industry. Through advertising
ad
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 the
company
 will be able to share the update of their newest version of the most famous basketball foot ware like Kevin Durant's shoes. Since it is very well known, a lot of the avid fans of Kevin Durant for sure are
also
 going to buy the shoes
However
, I
also
 believe that some brand
items
 are no longer needed to have advertisements.
For instance
, the famous brands in the fashion of bag and shoe industry like Louise Vuitton, Prada, Channel, etc. These are the companies that most of the celebrities have their own customized
items
 so
therefore
 before the
company
 will post it to the market, the
items
 are already sold out. To conclude, advertisements have a lot of impacts to increase the sales of the
items
.
However
, there are some
company
 brands that don't need to advertise because of their well-known quality to the public.
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