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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ whilst true works of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Labeling
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 a painting, sculpture or any other form of
art
 as "Work of
Art
" requires a minimum justification that it is embedded with a certain uniqueness.
However
, the thought of perceiving the
arts
 have been dramatically changed through ages and now it
fallen
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 to
such
 an extent that, mediocre
arts
 are being portrayed as master classes. I totally agree with wit the statement and debunks the reasons and
also
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Art
 is said to be
most
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the most
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 divine thing that has been bestowed to certain highly dexterous
people
 In
early
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 days,
Art
 is considered to be
master
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 class only performed by few
people
. The change in
outlook
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the outlook
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 of
art
 had bought colossal damage not only to the values but
also
the
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people
 who revere
art
 .
Art
 can be of any
forms
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form
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, but in today’s age of
internet
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the internet
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, It turned to
pile
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a pile
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 of ashes.
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, In 2017 ,In
USA
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the USA
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 ,
weird
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a weird
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 instance came
into
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to
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 light, When a painting
done
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was done
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 by a social media
influencers
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influencer
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, who claimed to be
artist
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an artist
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, sold out to 2 billion US$, later it was found out that, he was drunk and was on drugs while painting that picture.
Moreover
, with rampant technological advancements, Humans are becoming more inept. Ascribed high standards of
arts
 have been stooped down to unimaginable
level
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levels
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. Standards became low and
people
 perceiving
arts
 decreased to trifles, which ultimately leads to moderate
art
 connoisseurs.
For instance
,
recent
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 survey conducted by “Harvard school of
arts
” In 2018, stated that
,
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 the drop in
art
 specialists significantly dropped by 200% , compared to
past
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the past
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 20 years. Another example to bolster the statement is that
,
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 recent fair of famous “New York”
art
 galleries, was hosted by
craftsman
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a craftsman
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, who passed out from a mediocre university. In conclusion, there are many reasons for which
outlook
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 of
art
 has been compromised.
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On
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 of which is
invasion
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an invasion
the invasion
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 of technology and another one is
lack
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the lack
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 of genuine
art
 connoisseurs available in the market.
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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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