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Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is believed that a
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 percentage of individuals in today's world, engage themselves in leisure activities.
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 situation and the potential
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 it can have on the person and society. To start with, the main reason why many
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 nowadays spend less
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 on pursuing their hobbies
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 is lack of
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. The working crowd is often seen spending longer hours at
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, leading a stressful
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 is mainly due to their goals towards achieving their targets and, eventually, growing higher up on their career ladder.
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 often tend to
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 routine in order to gain
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 benefits as well.
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, I remember a friend from school who always used to win medals for basketball.
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, due to her corporate
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 she has lost touch with the game and is suffering from a lot of health issues.
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, having no
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 to spend on the activities they love,
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 and society can face unforeseen
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. Many
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 are so tied up with their
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 routine that they have minimum
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 to look after their health, both physical as well as mental.
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, research has shown that there has been a 35% increase in mental health patients in the past 5 years, owing to poor
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life
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 balance.
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, due to poor
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life
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 balance, the community has had adverse
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.
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 these days have become more robotic in nature. In the virtual world we live in, it is seen that
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 are so confined to their
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, they barely spend
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 with their family or friends.
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 main reason for his divorce. To summarise, I think the major cause for
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 to devote
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 to hobbies these days is leading a stressful
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life
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 can have adverse
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 on the well being of the individual as well as society.

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Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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