Popular events like football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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you turn on the television and flick-- through the pages of a newspaper, you learn about advancement in different

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playing on

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and international

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. Some

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believe that

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are the most responsible and secure

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in order to let out stress between

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devotion toward your

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are not only the best

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release

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is through

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peace

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is a key to the survival of a nation.

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by any means, you can let it out by beating them in

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when you play with them. Not only it gives you a chance to build new relationships but

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top of that, international

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chance to

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met at

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to be the best

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to create harmony and

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between

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effective

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to ease stress and

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patriotism, the idea that

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is completely

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every

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are cruel, they do not want

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and shows no flexibility in

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behaviour.

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is to destroy the

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and its economy. No matter what ways you try to mend

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with them,

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of no use. The only

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to deal with them is war. The

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relationship

between Pakistan and India,

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in a peaceful

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. Overall, the idea that

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between

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can only be obtained through playing

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international

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level is not applicable in all

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essay argued that the

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who consider

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occasions, essential to build

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and

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patriotism,

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underestimate the power of other methods and intentions of some

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be considered as a factor to achieve

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and

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devotion for your

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Popular events like football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Your opinion

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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?