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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and your opinion.

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it is undeniable, that sports performs an important role in our everyday life. A number of people expect to organise various global activities in their own nation. Others argue that it accrues many issues in comparison to benefits. I will discuss both views and give my opinion before reaching conclusion. there are many benefits of organising international gaming
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, A majority of citizens would take part and have a chance to win a big amount when they win. they should encourage other people
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, Audiences are coming from overseas and stay in hotels and guesthouses that boost tourism industries so the government can build a better future for the nation.
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, the Olympic games collected a huge amount in 1893 so authorities build many roads and started huge public transport in various cities. There are a few proven drawbacks that are as follows.
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 are waste of time and money.
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 modern ,era various sportsmen are taking harmful medicines to enhance their ability. Todays's young youth following celebrities and sportsmen blindly so they learn many negative things.
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, if the participator does not have enough amount of money so they can go on a crime road. In my opinion, the government have to organise international sports
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 but they have to take proper precautions. To conclude, it has been absorbed that
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 have both positive and negative effects
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 if excellent planning and under proper security it has been done that can deliver many benefits.
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