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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#development #communication #people #friends
Getting new friends with the help of websites interaction. People are getting attracked towards talking on internet. It is believed by many that, nobody will be isolated and it will be easy for everyone to make new friends. I do not agree with the statement.
Firstly
, the essay will explain the impact of chatting online on an indivialdual in social interaction.
Furthermore
, it will showcase dangerousness of these web interaction. Most people in today's world speak to each other online. But, some take it too far, by intracting just on the internet. It has no good implication in a
person
's life as the
person
 become socially challenged by
this
 and there is no chance the same individual have confidence to talk to anyone outside of world of web.
For instance
: A boy with same habit gets into a room full of people, he will be shy all the time, may have anxiety attacks or might not have any communication skills. Now, If we look into harm it is inflicting in our society, it can be considered as serious concern. On Internet, nobody's indentity is reveled. A
person
 can hide is indentity and talk to anyone. Anyone can influence anybody with some videos and pictures without even knowing who is doing it.
For example
: A boy or a girl can influenced by any terriost organization very easily with the help of fake identity. At
last
, it can summarised that, social media can help a
person
 to connect with a old friend but, majorily it is making our youth socially challenged and is creating a dangerous environment to live in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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