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Popular events like football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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These days,
everyday
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 you turn on the television and flick through the pages of a newspaper, you learn about advancement in different
sports
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 playing on
domestic
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a domestic
the domestic
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 and international
level
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levels
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. Some
people
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 believe that
sports
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 are the most responsible and secure
way
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 in order to let out stress between
countries
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 and to
show
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 devotion toward your
country
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.
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 essay will argue that
sports
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 are not only the best
way
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 to
attaiu
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attain
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 goal, there are other methods
which
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that
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 should be considered in some cases. For many
people
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, the safest
way
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 to
releas
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release
 tension among
countries
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 is through
sports
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.
People
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 think that
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peace
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 is a key to the survival of a nation.
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, if you have hatred for some
country
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 by any means, you can let it out by beating them in
sports
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. Another factor to consider is, you can mend their
relationship
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 with other
countries
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,
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 when you play with them. Not only it gives you a chance to build new relationships but
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 it helps in promoting
countries
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enconomy
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economy
. On
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top of that, international
sports
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 provide you
a
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with a
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chance to
show
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loyality
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loyalty
 towards your
country
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.
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, the
relationship
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 between Pakistan and Turkey
built
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was built
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 when
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the team
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team
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teams
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 met at
international
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an international
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 level and support
eachother
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each other
.
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 why
,
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sports
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are consider
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 to be the best
way
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 to create harmony and
peace
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 between
countries
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. Despite the fact that international
sports
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 are
the
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an
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 effective
way
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 to ease stress and
show
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 patriotism, the idea that
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it's
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 the only
way
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 is completely
prepostereous
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preposterous
. Undoubtedly,
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 method can not be helpful in
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every
country
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. Some
countries
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 are cruel, they do not want
peace
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 and shows no flexibility in
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their
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 behaviour.
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, their only
intentions
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intention
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 is to destroy the
country
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 and its economy. No matter what ways you try to mend
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relationship
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your relationship
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 with them,
its
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 of no use. The only
way
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 to deal with them is war. The
relationship
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 between Pakistan and India,
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, cannot
be mend
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be mended
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 in a peaceful
way
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. Overall, the idea that
peace
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 between
countries
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 can only be obtained through playing
sports
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 at
international
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the international
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 level is not applicable in all
suituations
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situations
This
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 essay argued that the
people
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 who consider
sports
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 occasions, essential to build
peace
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 and
show
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 patriotism,
they
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apply
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underestimate the power of other methods and intentions of some
countries
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. In my opinion, war should
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 be considered as a factor to achieve
peace
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 and
show
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 devotion for your
country
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.
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