Popular events like football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days,
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you turn on the television and flick through the pages of a newspaper, you learn about advancement in different
sports
playing on
domestic
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and international
level
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levels
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. Some
people
believe that
sports
are the most responsible and secure
way
in order to let out stress between
countries
and to
show
devotion toward your
country
.
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sports
are not only the best
way
to
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attain
this
goal, there are other methods
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should be considered in some cases. For many
people
, the safest
way
to
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release
tension among
countries
is through
sports
.
People
think that
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peace
is a key to the survival of a nation.
Moreover
, if you have hatred for some
country
by any means, you can let it out by beating them in
sports
. Another factor to consider is, you can mend their
relationship
with other
countries
,
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when you play with them. Not only it gives you a chance to build new relationships but
also
it helps in promoting
countries
enconomy
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economy
. On
the
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top of that, international
sports
provide you
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chance to
show
loyality
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loyalty
towards your
country
.
For instance
, the
relationship
between Pakistan and Turkey
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when
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the team
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team
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teams
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met at
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an international
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level and support
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each other
.
That is
why
,
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sports
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to be the best
way
to create harmony and
peace
between
countries
. Despite the fact that international
sports
are
the
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effective
way
to ease stress and
show
patriotism, the idea that
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the only
way
is completely
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preposterous
. Undoubtedly,
this
method can not be helpful in
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every
country
. Some
countries
are cruel, they do not want
peace
and shows no flexibility in
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behaviour.
Furthermore
, their only
intentions
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intention
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is to destroy the
country
and its economy. No matter what ways you try to mend
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your relationship
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with them,
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of no use. The only
way
to deal with them is war. The
relationship
between Pakistan and India,
For instance
, cannot
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in a peaceful
way
. Overall, the idea that
peace
between
countries
can only be obtained through playing
sports
at
international
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the international
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level is not applicable in all
suituations
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situations
This
essay argued that the
people
who consider
sports
occasions, essential to build
peace
and
show
patriotism,
they
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underestimate the power of other methods and intentions of some
countries
. In my opinion, war should
also
be considered as a factor to achieve
peace
and
show
devotion for your
country
.
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