More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to past. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

In
this
high technology world,
people
like to live alone more than to live in
the
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society
.
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essay will discuss the reasons
of
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why
people
who
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tend to live alone in
this
contemporary world. The reason why
people
prefer to live by themselves lie in individuals and societal values. One of the reasons is increasing modernization.
People
in the past lived with a big family and cared about the family and community,
however
,
people
in the present prioritize their own life over others.
Therefore
, individualism is increasing in modern
society
.
People
like to be alone without any
distraction
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distractions

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and
disturbance
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from others. They opt to live alone.
In addition
, to
this
,
society
starts to respect
to
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this
kind
of family in a different way.
For example
,
people
have come to any gathering or family party with different types of families like a single-person household.
This
developing trend can have advantages and disadvantages results. With regards to advantages, those at
kind
of
people
are able to concentrate on their studies.
For instance
, they can improve their on-computer skills because
this
kind
of major needs more focusing as well as no disturbing.
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so they can put all their energy into learning
this
type of course.
On the other hand
, living alone
by
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on

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own can alienate
themselves
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from others including family members. The result of
this
kind
of life is loneliness. In conclusion, living alone can become
a
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main path in some societies because now we live in an individualistic
society
and we are going
to
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at

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this
rapid pace.
This
type of life’s make distance between family members and
society
.
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