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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

#home #hands #machines #development
In
this
 technological era,
machines
 have taken place of the hard
work
 of people that they used to do in the past for producing commodities. Some people believe that
invention
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 of
machines
 has brought so many pros with it while others think it has various negative points. I believe that the development of technology has made the lives of individuals more smooth and easier than before.
To begin
 with,
machines
 have been
repalced
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replaced
 the human hard
work
 that used to be done before the innovation of technological tools that has brought more comfort and convenience in people's lives. The
first
 and most important benefit is the saving of a lot of time due to technological instruments.
For instance
, in India, individuals used to sew clothes manually
that
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 was too much time consuming and
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hard-working
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hard
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a hard
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 working task. With the help of
machines
, it has become more convenient to stitch dresses that
has
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 proved beneficial for peeps as it has given them extra time that
hey
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they
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 can use for doing other important
work
.
In addition
 to that, the development of technological gadgets plays a vital role in the growth of a nation's economy as it raises production
level
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levels
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 and employment options for citizens in huge industries implementing big projects. The
work
 used to
done
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do
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 by hand is done through
mahines
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machines
that is
 more fast and quick as it leads to more production of goods.
Thus
,
this
 enhances the production material in a country to import to other nations which results in the well being of
respective
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 state.
Moreover
,
implementation
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the implementation
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 of big projects to manufacture commodities demands a vast number of labours that increases more employment opportunities for the civilians. In conclusion, as the invention of technological tools has given various fruitful results to individuals, so
i
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 believe that it will be proved a boon for all.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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