In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today’s world,
both
the
parents
feel
urge
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the urge
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to do strenuous
work
so that they can save money for their
kids
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kid's
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education.
Nevertheless
, due to
absence
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the absence
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of
parents
at
home
,
kids
have to face
lack
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a lack
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of support. I will
be presents
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be presenting
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my views on
both
opinion
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opinions
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in
this
essay.
Firstly
, in today’s fast- pacing world, where price surging is a big issue.
Consequently
, to save for
child’s
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a child’s
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higher studies and to meet the ends of family, it is
a
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mandatory for
both
the
parents
to
work
. If mother and father will
both
do job
subsequently
, they can afford things and can have
better
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a better
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life
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lives
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for themselves and their children. As we have seen,
mostly
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most
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mom
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moms
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refrained themselves in the
home
and give their all attention to their babies or household.
Therefore
, she will have no time for herself. By going out at
work
, it will give her time to think about herself and will
also
give her financial independence.
For example
, if
mother
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the mother
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of a toddler
start
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starts
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doing
job
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the job
a job
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, she will meet new people at
work
which will not only refresh her mood but will
also
give her confidence.
Secondly
, teenagers need
parents
at
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apply
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for emotional support and expect their
mainly
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main
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mother
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mothers
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to give them attention. But when nobody is around
kids
, they can get addicted to video games. Excessive use of mobile phones can affect their eyes and health.
Moreover
, there are many cases getting reported that
kids
fall
in
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into
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this
cyber trap and have
use
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used
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their
parent
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parents
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debit or credit card and have lost a huge amount of money. In the conclusion, we can say that there are two schools of opinion. One is that
both
partners need to earn money to live a happy life. The counterargument of
this
is that
kids
at
home
required at least one parent at
home
. The solution to
this
problem is
hybrid
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a hybrid
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approach. At least one of the
parent
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parents
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,
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apply
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can do
job
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the job
a job
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that doesn’t require to go office and can do
work
from
home
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income households
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • emotional well-being
  • parental involvement
  • social development
  • extracurricular activities
  • childcare solutions
  • time management
  • career advancement
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