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s people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure? Have you any reservations? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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The technology of cloning is advanced as we move towards the future it has become normal
eventhough
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even though
, it is not welcomed by the majority of
people
.
However
, we get to know cloning better by understanding the advantages in my opinion humans might learn to accept it. To begin with, cloning humans for the purpose of supplying spare
organs
 seems to be useful and
time efficient
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 for the donors and patients as they would not have to be in a chaotic situation at the nick of the moment.
Therefore
, cloned human beings
organs
is
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 considered to be sufficient
eventhough
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even though
 it frightens
people
. As the
organs
 are cloned from artificial humans and it comes with the demerits
such
 as
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 need of replacing the body parts to improve the organ functions, stability etc seems to not convince
people
 that it is safe. If we are exposed to the advantages cloning comes with
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awareness programs, educational camps
people
 might believe in
this
 alternative.
For example
,
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conducting seminars on
this
 topic in schools will educate the children on cloning
hence
 introducing
this
 topic and avoiding the suspicion and encouraging
to
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the
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benifits
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benefits
benefit
.
Finally
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 it may be concluded that I do agree
for
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this
 procedure and there is scope for cloning human beings for their
organs
 as it is
convinient
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convenient
.
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