As well as making money, business have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

Business
can play a vital role in modern
society
. Apart from the high profit, I agree that
business
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a heavy social responsibility.
Business
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provides working opportunities for unemployed
people
with wisdom and creativity. It can partly solve the problem of
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unemployment rate in
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society
. Meanwhile,
business
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provides a chance for
people
from less well-off
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to get rid of poverty.
Business
requires
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restrictions
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education degree and family support, as long as
people
have amazing ideas and the character of hard-working.
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the long run,
Business
is helpful to close the wealth divide between the rich and the poor in a
society
.
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can supply household products to
people
who live in rural and remote
areas
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business
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can help
people
from
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family
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families
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to improve their living conditions.
For example
, some
areas
are lack
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foods
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or water because of
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extreme weather condition and poor farming technology. At that time,
people
could buy products transported from other
areas
to meet their basic
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.
Business
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strengthen the economic tie between different
areas
and promote the economic development of the whole
society
.
Business
is responsible
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the environment. Most
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business
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activities rely on
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transportation.
However
, the emissions of vehicles and planes which contain carbon dioxide are harmful to the air. It may
also
cause
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global warming and many other environmental problems.
Similarly
, the process of producing production can
also
generate poisonous gas and substance. More environment-friendly methods of transportation and manufacture should be taken.
Moreover
, there are more green products have been produced
such
as recycled
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and
clean energy
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cars to protect the environment. In conclusion, I agree that with exception of making money,
business
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society
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devote to reducing the unemployment rate, providing financial support to rural
areas
and protecting the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social responsibilities
  • contribute
  • well-being
  • community
  • philanthropy
  • sustainability
  • ethical
  • trust
  • reputation
  • accountable
  • profit-making
  • balance
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