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As well as making money, business have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #business #responsibilities
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Business
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 can play a vital role in modern
society
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. Apart from the high profit, I agree that
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business
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undertake
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 a heavy social responsibility.
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Business
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 provides working opportunities for unemployed
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 with wisdom and creativity. It can partly solve the problem of
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 unemployment rate in
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society
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. Meanwhile,
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business
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 provides a chance for
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 from less well-off
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 to get rid of poverty.
Business
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 requires
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 restrictions
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 education degree and family support, as long as
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 have amazing ideas and the character of hard-working.
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 the long run,
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 is helpful to close the wealth divide between the rich and the poor in a
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.
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 can supply household products to
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 who live in rural and remote
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, which means
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business
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 can help
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 from
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family
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families
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 to improve their living conditions.
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, some
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 are lack
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foods
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 or water because of
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extreme weather condition and poor farming technology. At that time,
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 could buy products transported from other
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 to meet their basic
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needs
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.
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Business
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 strengthen the economic tie between different
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 and promote the economic development of the whole
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.
Business
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 is responsible
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 the environment. Most
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business
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 activities rely on
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transportation.
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, the emissions of vehicles and planes which contain carbon dioxide are harmful to the air. It may
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 cause
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global warming and many other environmental problems.
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, the process of producing production can
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 generate poisonous gas and substance. More environment-friendly methods of transportation and manufacture should be taken.
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, there are more green products have been produced
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 as recycled
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 and
clean energy
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 cars to protect the environment. In conclusion, I agree that with exception of making money,
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 is responsible
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society
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.
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 devote to reducing the unemployment rate, providing financial support to rural
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 and protecting the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social responsibilities
  • contribute
  • well-being
  • community
  • philanthropy
  • sustainability
  • ethical
  • trust
  • reputation
  • accountable
  • profit-making
  • balance
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