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Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people’s lives in negative ways . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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News
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 plays a vital role in
society
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. It is thought by some that the
news
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media
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 have had an adverse impact on individuals' lives.
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 I understand the negative aspects of
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 reporting, I entirely disagree with
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 view and believe that the
news
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media
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 contribute to a safer and more fulfilling life. Individuals in
society
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 reap the benefit of information that the
news
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media
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 deliver. Through receiving the
news
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, the public
gain
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 an understanding of the current affairs, which helps them to be productive members of
society
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.
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,
news
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 informing about
people
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's achievements allows them to develop a positive attitude towards the world.
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, participants of the Tokyo
Olympic
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Olympics
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 held in 2021 spread positive messages across the world, teaching citizens about the importance of hard work, dedication and fairness. Some
people
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 might argue that the excessive amount of negative
news
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,
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 as mass
killing
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killings
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 and natural disasters, has had a negative effect on individuals' mental health.
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, reporting
such
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 events is essential in order for the public to take preventive measures for the future. In Japan,
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, the
news
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 about the Great East Japan Earthquake which occurred in 2011 not only helped
people
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 in affected areas with the evacuation process but
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 contributed to the increased awareness about natural disasters among citizens in the country. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea that
news
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 providers have affected
people
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's lives negatively for psychological and safety reasons. It is crucial that we utilise information from the
news
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media
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 to improve our lives and
society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contentious
  • sensationalism
  • misinformation
  • exaggerated reporting
  • public panic
  • fake news
  • public opinion
  • social media platforms
  • erosion of trust
  • journalism
  • cynicism
  • polarized society
  • democratic processes
  • public discourse
  • media literacy
  • critical thinking
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