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Share your innovative thoughts on how we as the youth can contribute to a Sustainable Planetary Earth

#thoughts #youth #earth
The planet we live in is our home and the way we treat it is absolutely incorrect.
Instead
 of making our planet
better
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a better
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 and
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safer
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saver
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safer
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 place to live,
people
,
on the contrary
, make it worse. It seems like we develop life, but the methods that are used in
this
 process are harmful to
earth
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the earth
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. Why don’t
people
 invest more in protecting our world? I suggest, that we should be more careful with our planet, eventually, we are the ones who suffer from
this
.To solve
this
 problem, we can use different methods. My offer is to do more recycling. We can recycle containers,
such
 as cans of drinks or just use long-term containers.
People
 can share clothes that they don’t use with other
people
. After all, lots of energy is needed to make new clothes. There is nothing wrong
in
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 wearing
second hand
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 clothes
,
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 since it helps us to overcome
the
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environmental pollution. I believe, that with
effort
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the effort
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 of
people
 we can overcome the problem. After all, we are the ones responsible for
this
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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