Share your innovative thoughts on how we as the youth can contribute to a Sustainable Planetary Earth

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The planet we live in is our home and the way we treat it is absolutely incorrect.

Instead

of making our planet

better

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a better

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and

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safer

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saver

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safer

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place to live,

people

on the contrary

, make it worse. It seems like we develop life, but the methods that are used in

this

process are harmful to

earth

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the earth

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. Why don’t

people

invest more in protecting our world? I suggest, that we should be more careful with our planet, eventually, we are the ones who suffer from

this

.To solve

this

problem, we can use different methods. My offer is to do more recycling. We can recycle containers,

such

as cans of drinks or just use long-term containers.

People

can share clothes that they don’t use with other

people

. After all, lots of energy is needed to make new clothes. There is nothing wrong

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wearing

second hand

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clothes

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since it helps us to overcome

the

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apply

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environmental pollution. I believe, that with

effort

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the effort

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people

we can overcome the problem. After all, we are the ones responsible for

this

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

173 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Share your innovative thoughts on how we as the youth can contribute to a Sustainable Planetary Earth

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that it is best to encourage children to have a healthy diet at school while others believe that parents should be the ones to teach children to have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that the government should subsidise fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Others argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Thanks to developments in technology, many people today have lost basic skills such as how to repair clothes, etc. Why is this happening? Do you think that this is a negative development?