Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsorypart of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improvingthe neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent doyou agree or disagree?

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Some people think that free social

activities

should be a mandatory part of high

school

programs. While

students

who take part in these

activities

may face some unexpected issues, I agree that educators should design required

community

services

for their high

school

students

without any payments. On the one hand, the most considerable trouble that affects

students

when participating in public

activities

is the shortage of time. Particularly, they may be less focused on their core lessons in class, even lack leisure time because of spending too much time on

community

services

Besides

, there are obligatory

services

which do not suit everyone.

For example

, working for a charity in mountainous places suburban areas requires

students

to have to go far away or teaching sports to younger children at an outdoor stadium demands good health. All of these types of work do not fit the weak girls or unhealthy

students

On the other hand

, attending unpaid public

services

will bring great benefits to high

school

students

Firstly

, these programs create a positive environment for

students

to be raised in a holistic way, not only improving their social knowledge but

also

motivate their perception about outdoor life.

This

is really an appropriate method to train them on how to work for the interest of the

community

instead

of living only for themselves.

Secondly

, taking part in public

activities

such

as volunteer campaigns and charity organizations is a highlighted point that makes their resume brilliant. If an applicant who has the same qualification, as well as experiences with other candidates, would like to apply for a scholarship or a competitive job, his past

activities

for the interest of the

community

may make an outstanding contribution in helping him defeat the others. In conclusion,

although

there are some disadvantages, it seems to me that we should design more unpaid obligatory

community

programs for high

school

students

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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