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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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People have different views about attending
to
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single-sex
schools
. Some of them are worried
about
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that
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children
 who spend their
school
 life in
this
 kind of
school
 would suffer negative
inpacts
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impacts
impact
 in their future life. In my opinion, I
compeletly
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completely
agree
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this
 view and I will give my reasons in
this
 essay.
First
, single-sex
schools
 are instituted for some special parents and students. In
ancient
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 world, we often
seperated
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separated
 girls from boys for obeying some moral and ethnic rules, which resulted that some people still believe that
this
 education system is beneficial for youngers.
For example
, there are single-sex
schools
 in Japanese nowadays because of traditional cultures.
Besides
, having single-sex
schools
 is not uncommon in some
region
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 due to religious beliefs. Whereas these cases mentioned above, I believe that we should send our
children
 to a co-educational
school
.
This
 is not to say that we must objective other single-sex
schools
 and force all
student
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 to attend co-
eductional
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educational
schools
. We should respect different cultures and beliefs. There are two main reasons why I do not choose a single-sex
school
. On
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on
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 hand,
schools
 have never been a place for us to learn
knowleadge
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knowledge
 only, but we learn how to interact with a variety of persons
at
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there. If there are only girls or boys at
schools
, the social network would be incomplete.
On the other hand
, some parents choose single-sex
schools
 for their
children
 to prevent their
children
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 in love too early. While
this
 thought is old-fashioned thanks to the development of social media and their
children
 are available to search
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 information they are interested in. In conclusion, the
exist
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 of
the
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single-sex
school
 is reasonable in some countries.
However
, I think that registering in a co-educational
school
 has more advantages.
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