Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. Do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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should get involved

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taking

responsibilities

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in

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school

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.

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, I believe that youth need to participate in the activities which are conducted by

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administration because it builds them positivity and confidence in the future. In

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essay,

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will discuss different outcomes and immense benefits of participating. On the one hand,

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and foremost reason is that kids can gain knowledge with the participation because it boosts them to develop

personality

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a personality

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, encouraging a child as a helper in the

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benefits staff in the

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.

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,

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helps tiny blossoms to develop trust and enthusiasm to show their talent in managing some assignments given by authorities of the

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can help schools in saving their time and energy by doing group participation.

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, volunteering always helps younger ones to develop

efficiency

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of work and getting different ideas when they take part with their teachers and other staff in the

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,helping kindergarten

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in

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leisure times from bigger classes.

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, others believe that in the adolescent age kids have to be more focused in the

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settings because it is essential rather

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participating in the

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's activities.

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, parents always seek their

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to be more attentive in the class as they believe that getting good marks and grades always helps them to build

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a career

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career

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in the future.

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, schools always support

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statements and forcing students to develop

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curriculum

planning in the

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settings rather

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on the youth personality development. To conclude, In my

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believe that

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to gain in the

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and able to manage in the

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setting and helping

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authorities

of the

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because it can benefit to develop leadership qualities.