Some people think that all young people should be required to stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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EDUCATION IS A CRUCIAL PART OF EVERY INDIVIDUAL.SOME

INDIVIDUAL

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BELIEVS

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BELIEVES

THAT YOUNG BLOOD SHOULD CONTINUE THEIR

FULL TIME

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STUDY

UNTILE

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THEY TURN MAJOR.I

COMPLETLY

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NOTION AND MY SUPPORTING REASONS WILL BE DISCUSSED IN THE FOLLOWING PARAGRAPHS. TO COMMENCE WITH, EDUCATION IS A BASIC PILLAR OF ANYONE'S FOUNDATION.IF SOMEONE IS DOING

PART TIME

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JOB WITH

STUDIES

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THEY ARE COMPRISING THEIR FUTURE WITH IT AS THEY CAN NOT

FOCOUS

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FOCUS

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ON ONE THING PROPERLY.BY DOING BOTH THINGS

TOGATHER

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TOGETHER

THEY MIGHT GET SICK AND FEEL STRESSED

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THE SAME TIME.

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,IF ONE MINOR BOY IS DOING JOB AND

STUDIES

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TOGATHER

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TOGETHER

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HIS

STUDIES

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WILL SUFFER AND HIS RESULT WILL BE AFFECTED.

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THEY CAN MANAGE TO WORK AND STUDY,PARENTS SHOULD NOT ALLOW THEM TO DO

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JOB

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COMPETITIVE ERA, IT IS VITAL TO HAVE KNOWLEDGE OF EVERYTHING. IT IS CERTAINLY TRUE TO SAY THAT IN SOME COUNTRIES PEOPLE WHO ARE NOT MAJOR ARE NOT ALLOWED TO WORK AS IT IS

ILLEGALE

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ILLEGAL

AND CONSIDERED AS A CRIME.I BELIEVE IN THE TENDER AGE THEY ARE NOT CAPABLE ENOUGH TO MAKE FRIM DECISION AND ONE WRONG DECISION CAN RUIN THEIR FUTURE.

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IS THE AGE WHERE THEY CAN GET EASILY

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BECAUSE THEY ARE ATTRACTED TO LUXURIOUS

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THEY CAN HAVE BETTER VISION ABOUT FUTURE AND IT CAN HELP THEM TO

ACHIVE

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ACHIEVE

DESIRED GOALS.NOWADAYS

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ENCOURAGING

STUDIES

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EVERY

CITIES

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AS WELL AS COUNTRYSIDE AREAS.

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ACTIVITY SHOWS THE IMPORTANCE OF STUDY IN EVERY

ONES

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LIFE. BY CONCLUDING THE SAME, FULL-TIME EDUCATION IS REQUIRED

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EVERY YOUNG GENERATION AS IT IS BASIC

NEEDS

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ERA.IT CAN HELP THEM TO

ACHIVE

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ACHIEVE

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

comprehensive education
intellectual growth
emotional growth
social growth
evolving job market
specialized knowledge
extended education
reducing inequality
essential competencies
vocational training
economic impact
financial constraints
infrastructure
stress and burnout
personal aspirations
career aspirations

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Some people think that all young people should be required to stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

Some people think products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making products cheap is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A friend has agreed to look after your house pad pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Give contact details for when you are away. Give instructions about how to care for you pet. Describe other household duties you would like your friend to undertake.

The best way to solve the world's enviromental prolem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Goverments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. Do you agree or disagree?