For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. to what extent do you agree?

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, society thinks reading, writing and maths are

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of knowledge.But in recent years some believe

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added to the fourth skill.For

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or job.

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carpenter, who makes wonderful furniture other wooden stuff and sold in local market versus who makes just great ones but sell in

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two earnings who know

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and internet earnings will enormous.Because his customer is seven billion people so knowing technology gives us so many

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advantages

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not only

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improve our knowledge and live condition.Using a desktop or laptop with

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gives us global

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so who lives in

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can know what happened in

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with help of

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people can create robots with artificial intelligence so humans can no longer do physical hard works

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as landscaping, grounds-keeping, roofers.

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only technology

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learn more technology. In conclusion

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undoubtedly

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knowledge can help us greatly so it should be added in the list of

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part of educations and already many nations

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as USA, England, China etc added

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to subject and teaching

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programmes

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in kids.Since it has

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obvious positive impact on various essential life facilities.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. to what extent do you agree?

many people work long hours,leaving very little time for leisure activities.Does this situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

⚪️ People these days watch TV, films and other programmes alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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Some people think that large international sporting events only brings drawbacks, and that it is not worth hosting them. Do you agree or disagree?

J. Multinational companies have become increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this method?