For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. to what extent do you agree?

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, society thinks reading, writing and maths are

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of knowledge.But in recent years some believe

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science

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added to the fourth skill.For

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time

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is everything.

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era all things connected with computers

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humans communicated

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other exchanged information anywhere and anytime developed faster than before.If

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or job.

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carpenter, who makes wonderful furniture other wooden stuff and sold in local market versus who makes just great ones but sell in

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online

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two earnings who know

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and internet earnings will enormous.Because his customer is seven billion people so knowing technology gives us so many

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advantages

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improve our knowledge and live condition.Using a desktop or laptop with

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gives us global

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so who lives in

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can know what happened in

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with help of

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people can create robots with artificial intelligence so humans can no longer do physical hard works

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only technology

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us to get out

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planets and galaxy so humans need to

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learn more technology. In conclusion

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undoubtably

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undoubtedly

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knowledge can help us greatly so it should be added in the list of

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part of educations and already many nations

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a computer

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to subject and teaching

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programmes

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in kids.Since it has

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obvious positive impact on various essential life facilities.

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