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Many species of plants and animals are declining in the world. Give possible reasons and offer solutions?

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Introduction
It is true that the fauna and flora
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 diminishing at an alarming rate.
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 essay will explain some underlying factors that give rise to
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phenomenom
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phenomenon
 and illustrate some solutions to tackle the problem.
Body paragraph 1
The devastating effects of industrialization, compounded with the increasing garbage from
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 process is being blamed for making plants and animals dying out. Forests,
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 used to be habitable for many rare and wild species, are being currently replaced by new invasive cities and buildings,
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 directly displacing and killing them.
Industrialization
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 has
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 accumulated wastes produced from the manufacturing process, and some companies have deliberately littered it to rivers or
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the sea
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.
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 has poisoned sea creatures, and the diversity of animals and plants has decreased
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Body paragraph 2
In fact, the damage was calculated while some measures
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 as forcing companies to use alternative energy with no waste or banning deforestation have been given out in order to protect natural habitat, but some bureaucratic governments are never serious. To me, the most plausible solution is yourself. We, as individuals, could push our governments and companies to meet their commitment by only voting for politicians who are aware of environmental issues or only buying products from environment-oriented producers, so that these entities would be forced to care about the species’ living zone.
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, voting for Joe Biden, who committed to protect the natural habitat as a mission in his presidency in the upcoming US election could be a great way to tackle the issue.
Conclusion
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 many natural species are dying out, if we can identify the aforementioned reasons, and realize that each individual is a key, the problem can be solved.

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