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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in Zoos. Others, believe that there are good reasons of having Zoos. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many believe that
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 are antiquated and inhumane. In my opinion, though
zoos
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 raise legitimate ethical concerns, their value for conservation is greater than ever before. Critics of
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 argue that the animal life simulated
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is unnatural. In the majority of
zoos
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,
animals
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 are kept in small enclosures or cages. Any visitor to a zoo is
first
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 struck by the lack of energy and vitality present in
animals
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 not living in their natural habitats and fending for themselves.
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 unnatural divorce from their intended purpose in life is inherently unethical. Added to
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 is the fact that there are now alternatives to
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. In countries
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 as Kenya and Tanzania, where the Serengeti is located, there are sprawling national preserves that accomplish the dual aims of aiding animal conservation and allowing interested spectators to see wildlife up close.
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,
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 are principal locations for wildlife research and preservation initiatives. Nearly every zoo will not only allow local researchers to learn more about
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 but
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 contain programs for increasing population numbers. The hastening of climate change has brought disastrous results to animal habitats around the world and thousands of
animals
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 are now endangered. It is nearly impossible to quickly restore their homes so the only option remaining is to breed
animals
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 in captivity to increase their numbers and
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 release them into the wild later.
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 situation is unfortunate but necessary and will only become more essential in years to come as greater numbers of species are threatened and
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 become a key location for raising both public awareness and population levels. In conclusion, despite the moral hazards
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 entail, their effect on wildlife conservation is crucial. Countries should
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 continue to maintain their current
zoos
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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