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Advertising encourages consumers to buy in quantity rather than promoting quality. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#consumers #quantity #quality
It is radically correct that in the modern era, people are more inclined towards purchasing
equipments
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equipment
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 in larger quantities and completely devoiding their quality. Nowadays, advertisement plays a vital role in capturing people's brain. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will enlighten my thoughts on the above notion. To embark upon, I think consumers are immensely fascinated by product advertisement which offers reasonable discounts, offers and sales despite
of
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fact that these stocks
has
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 awful characteristics ,but, advertisers make sure to present it in a way, that it
hypotizes
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hypnotizes
hypnotises
 purchasers and they neglect the product
qualtity
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quality
 over quantity.
Furthermore
, companies are now facing big trouble due to product competition.
Every-day
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 new goods are being launched in the market
in
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low
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a low
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 price. so, To make it less expensive and
cost effective
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, companies are compromising on the standard of the quality of their
products
.
In addition
, advertisements lure the buyers by hiring celebrities to promote the
products
 and people become entice to buy
it
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 without doing any research.
For instance
, beauty
products
 which
is
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 not as effective as
it
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portrays by the celebs
contains
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 terrible ingredients, but, women spend money without visualizing
its
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 features. They regret
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buying it after they experience any allergy or reactions on their skin. On
other hand
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, I disagree with
this
 concept owing to fact that some goods should be purchased
in
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low
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a low
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price
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prices
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 and in larger quantities because
its
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their
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 usage is short-spanned.
For example
, I would prefer buying tissues, gloves and masks
in
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 low prices without bothering
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about
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 their quality. In the end, we should do our basic findings
about
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 the goods we are purchasing rather ended up buying menial
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pervasiveness
  • mislead
  • economic benefits
  • product longevity
  • durability
  • differentiate
  • craftsmanship
  • targeted advertising
  • flash sales
  • limited-time offers
  • consumer base
  • consumer awareness
  • narrative
  • manufacturing process
  • environmental impact
  • psychological triggers
  • fear of missing out (FOMO)
  • rational decisions
  • allure
  • amass
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